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[Joe91]

So, everything is possible,
the fiction gives us an idea.
Multiplanetary is in progress,
what will we find?
Technology is a must-have,
a new era is dawning.
My heart has hope
from lived experience.
Peace, possibilities, potential.
Worlds, people, gemstones.
Kind of satisfaction,
the missing piece of creation's puzzle.
An open space.

 

[Driekes]

Moin Joe91,

Starker, hoffnungsvoller Ton.

Kleine Sprachhinweise (optional): A new era is dawning (poetischer als era is coming);
falls du bei era is coming bleiben möchtest: An era is coming (Artikel ergänzen).
Außerdem: from lived experience (statt due to the experienced feeling)
und the missing piece of creation’s puzzle (statt peace).
Der Rest liest sich klar.

LG. Driekes