Feedback jeder Art The Vision of the Wolf

[Joe91]

Ain't you what you seem to be?
I only tell you what I see!
You riddle! Blocking all along!
Destabilizing what is strong!
I feel intentions of your mind,
no need to overthink/rewind!
So don't you dare, you 'wolf as sheep!'
We're battle gods! Our strength is deep!

 

[Driekes]

Moin Joe91,

Raw and confrontational—battle-energy throughout.

Short bars, hard rhymes, and the “battle gods” closer lands like a taunt.
Punchy piece.

Tiny language notes (if helpful):
“destabilizing” (not “destabelizing”);
“wolf in sheep’s clothing” (not “wolf as sheep”);
and maybe “You’re a riddle—” (instead of “You riddle!”).

The rest hits hard. 😎

Greets Driekes